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Asked by William Mollohan on October 8, 2020

FRIENDS? 10/08/2020 WHM

Chapter 1
“Why are you here on Randolph’s personal, school playground, telephone wire, Miss Canary?”
“Hmmm … Randolph … that sounds better than ‘Straight Toes’ …
Also, it sounds better than this girl being called ‘Wobbly Beak’ … F Y I, I’m Mary”
“Oh, really …Mary? How would you like to hear every hour, ‘There he go – OOHHZZZZZ!
There gooooo- oez … straight toes’, huh?
“I get it Randolph; I hear ‘knobby-knees’ and ‘squirrely girlie’ all the time – what’s your point?”
“My point? C’mon, C’mon. You and I don’t belong here – you know that deep inside – we’re different – we don’t fit in. I’ve got no friends and I don’t need any – watch me swoop, Miss Canary. See yah!
As Randolph soared away, Mary Canary thought to herself, “what is different … what is normal …what is a friend … a classmate … here at Bird School Flight Academy?”

That night Randolph’s mom, who thought that her son was asleep, wrote in her journal …

They called him “stra

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