How to determine what POV to use
Asked by Anita Manuel on April 25, 2020
Here is a sample of what I have written:
Sweet and Sour Desire
Pastor Ashton Sowenzo sat in his study, humming, "You Don't Know What the Lord Has Done For Me." He was excited about the upcoming 100th Anniversary of The House of Power Ministries. The House of Power had withstood many obstacles and horrible rumors but maintained its influence in the community.
After 15 years, he was amazed that he was still the Pastor. His appointment was not received with joy by everyone– some of the members got downright ig'nant. The grace of God prevails as usual. The Lord supplied faithful members. Hallelujah.
Suddenly, concern replaced joy. He had a big problem. He was in love with one of his ministers. Confusion and longing stole his sleep at night and his concentration during the day. He prayed, and he prayed, but there was only silence from the Father.
Am I telling this from my pov or the character's pov?
Jerry's Answer
This is in the third person, limited to the pastor's perspective. And that's important. Make him your camera and microphone and be only in his head.
A few suggestions:
Ashton Sowenzo sat in his study, humming, excited about the upcoming 100th Anniversary of The House of Power Ministries. The church had overcome many obstacles and horrible rumors to maintain its influence in the community.
Ashton's appointment to the pastorate 15 years before had not been received with joy by everyone. Some members got downright 'dignant [original looked like a contraction of ignorant, not indignant, as I assume you mean]. But the grace of God prevailed and He supplied faithful members. Hallelujah.
But Ashton had a problem. He was in love with one of his ministers. Longing stole his sleep and his concentration. He prayed and prayed, but heard only silence.